poem i made.

#1
Hey, well i know this is isnt poetic justice and thats because i think its more of a female poem. if it needs to be moved that so be it.

true heartbreak and emotional breakdowns.
tear by tear shattering earths ground
screams defening sounds
image of the body, floating around.
mother found her five month baby
laying in her bed, her spirit fading.
yesterday they were playing.
and now hearts decaying.
each limb of the tree fraying.
family tree branch snapped off.
parents never heard grasping coughs.
asked boss for a raise, bossed just scoffed
thats where the story starts

*lets go back before the death.*


a 15 year old girl fell deeply for a guy
gave up herself in four months time.
knew he was the one, love couldnt lie
in his parents place, de-virginized.
took her in his room, told her its fine.
he would pull out,didnt cross her mind
it was both their first expierence of this kind.

It was done, she didnt know what to expect.
A decision she later came to regret.
But to late sperm and egg met.
pregnancy was already set.
Found two months after that special night.
That she was getting a delivery in life.
Went home told her boyfriend, both cried
Boyfriend hugged her told her its alright
Months went on, he got a job
girl stayed home, preparing to be mom.
she went into labor 7 months into it
went to the hospital begging god to forgive.
Maybe if he forgived her sins
this pregnancy wouldnt end
she gave birth 2 in the morning
6 pounds 5 ounces full of glory.
but the baby was two weak
stayed in the hospital for two weeks
While the baby was in there.
boy went to job, unprepared.
looked down under his bosses stare.
16 hows he going to get a raise?
asked boss just to extend his pay.
he needs to get a crib for his daughter to lay.
boss said no, only been working here
for half a year.
boy left eyes filled with tears.
baby came home to no crib or bassinet.
so on the parents bed she slept.
five months nothing happened yet.

*lets go to the present the day of the death*

until that one night
weather cold as ice.
all the family slept so tight.
shouldnt of layed the baby by your side.
rolled over, couldnt hear her cries
woke up to a baby, who couldnt open eyes.
mother and father begged god why
begging and pleading to let them die.
Their little girls gone to the heavens high
Because lifes hardships were just to much.
Pay was never enough.
lifes hardships came at them tough


*now bring you the future. after the death*


Now all three lay in the same cementary.
boy and girl got married
before with their baby they made their reuniting
two weeks after the death of their little girl.
married, holding each others hand, let their finger curl
around the trigger.
 

keco52

Well-Known Member
Staff member
#2
That was such a nice poem but the end was disturbing...
I wished it could have ended happily...but I guess that's life :/
 
#5
Well, i was talking to one of my friends and i was really bored, so i asked her to give me a topic to write on, she said true heartbreak and emotional breakdowns. And at that same time she was talking about her boyfriend, i was thinking how boyfriends can hurt but thats not true heartbreak to the fullest in my oppinon. (now at least since my daughter). So then i thought about what would be my worse situation. And that was it.
 

ArtsyGirl

Well-Known Member
#7
shattered dreams said:
So then i thought about what would be my worse situation. And that was it.
Yeah I couldnt imagine anything worse! :sad: And that stuff happens too. As far as the poem it was good, kept me interested all the way thru considering the topic.
 

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