save me

[KJ1]

First off i just wanna say this is my first poem so dont be too harsh



i wake up every day to find a way to kill myself
these pills i ingest slowly waste away my health
i dont mean im searching for a certain suicide
thru my life ive seen friends of mine o.d. and die
maybe one day i'll wake up and stop livin so rotten
start thinking of my family instead of these oxycontin
many go thru it but wont admit they have problems
but im beggin to ya god come save me from oxycontin

 

[KJ1]

any feedback on how i can improve would be appreciated

 

[Tha_Wood]

its not bad man, is this how u reely feel. also reply to a couple of other poems in here othere wise your thread will get closed

 

[KJ1]

no felt like that months ago but i still think about how screwed up i was......
and i did teply to three other threads do i need to reply more because i read them all anyway

 

[Tha_Wood]

oh soz nah u dont i didnt realize u replied to those

 

[KJ1]

im no junkie now, i used to be.... but i still think about all the
f#$ked up stuff i put me and my family thru.... so i dont want you all to think im crazy or have a death wish.....

 

[KJ1]

aight man you can open my other stuff now

 

[Sebastian]

Dont use oxycontin twice at the end of your lines.

If you want to improve, try to use a certain measure and keep it throughout the poem.