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Anticipation
Anticipation
It seems so strange yet so simple
gotta focus and work, will probably stay single
Cuttin' down on sleep - no matter what it takes
I gotta knock on this door until it shakes, breaks
Once I entered the room there is no stoppin' me
In vain I'll set free what they call my insanity
so I can cure, chill - let all go
lay back in peace cause I know
I reached what I'm destined 2 represent
see ya'all later on as I flow 2 heaven's end
can't no one touch me no more, I'm gone
and I deserve peace 'cause I search for so long
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that's nice. if you saw the other thread i replied in i already said im not into this text shit im just checking by here, but i thought this was cool. the last two lines are on some epic shit. 
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I agree the last two lines are very nice.
It's a very nice little piece. I like some of teh rhyme schemes like the "shakes,breaks" parts its not all the same old schemes.
All in all very good little piece.
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Nice little poem. Good flow.
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@preach - nice to see see
Farzin&breal - thx for replyin'
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Never cease to amaze me Meance...Good as always
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lay back in peace cause I know
I reached what I'm destined 2 represent
see ya'all later on as I flow 2 heaven's end
can't no one touch me no more, I'm gone
and I deserve peace 'cause I search for so long
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really loved that part
Keep up the great work as I know you will
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Nice to see u comin back to the board and not only that, but also postin' in here in PJ, I enjoy that, we need people here.
Thx for the love I guess.
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of course ima post here.....I was the ORIGINAL mod of Poetic Justice  SicC and I made the rules many moons ago lol....i'm thinking of posting some of my stuff too, but we'll see about that. maybe once i get a computer at home
btw: its nice to be back 
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uppin' cause I want 2
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Originally Posted by The.Menace
Anticipation
It seems so strange yet so simple
gotta focus and work, will probably stay single
Cuttin' down on sleep - no matter what it takes
I gotta knock on this door until it shakes, breaks
Once I entered the room there is no stoppin' me
In vain I'll set free what they call my insanity
so I can cure, chill - let all go
lay back in peace cause I know
I reached what I'm destined 2 represent
see ya'all later on as I flow 2 heaven's end
can't no one touch me no more, I'm gone
and I deserve peace 'cause I search for so long
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I see that your fav. topic is still your fav. topic, but the fact is that you do this well. The sentence structure you chose for this piece flows good as well as keeping it simple in a way for the reader to understand the despondecy that you are feeling. Although I wish you'd get a more upbeat view of your life, this was once again a good read by you....keep me posted on the poem book and less with the sarcasm (you bastard)
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